Like the bad plague, try to do your very best to avoid sentences that are or seem dead before they even begin. Here is a very fine example:

It is often said (still goes on) that……., and how (still goes on) about:

It can be…, and (still goes on)

We can surmise (still goes on) …

Sentences like this put you off instantly. Your esteemed readers will simply not want to go on when they arrive against these brick walls. How do we fix this?

It can be advantageous to take an (still goes on) umbrella when visiting London.

Fixed, this now reads:

When you visit London (still goes on), take an umbrella.

When you are reading the second sentence, it feels like a breath of fresh air compared to the first don’t you think?

If you can avoid the use of passive phrases in your sentences, you can really give make your words much stronger really!!! Passive words like “were”, “is”, “was”, “would have” “could have”, , and so on.

Take these two sentences for example:

The mouse was eaten by the cat (passive voice-”was eaten” ). A much better version would be:

The cat ate the mouse (active voice-”ate”).

These can be easily remembered if you can grasp what the subject and object truly is. The cat is the subject, the mouse is the object. A difference still exists in a few more words in a few words, for (subjective) example who and (objective), whom I (subjective) and (objective). me

The suggestion of a conspiracy theory to promote global warming was put suggested in a late ninety’s documentary The Greenhouse Conspiracy it was broadcasted by Channel Four in the United Kingdom on aug 12^th 90, as part of the famous Equinox series, which asserted that the “Real” scientists critical of the global warming theory were actually denied the funding the needed to carry out their work which would have been really useful today.

The big world government could be the best choice to lead (and control) us to a much better world!’ In this article, Gray also cites the ascendancy of Al Gore to the vice presidency as the start of his problems with federal funding.

This very popular conspiracy theory claims that a relatively “small” group of international elites controls and manipulate the governments of various nations, industry and media organizations worldwide. The said to be primary tool they use to dominate nations is the very popular system of central banking. They are said to have funded and in most cases fueled most of the major wars of the last two centuries, primarily through carrying out false flag attacks Aka. Pinning the crime on sum one else to manipulate populations of various nations into supporting them, and have a grip on the world’s economy, deliberately causing inflation and depressions at will (for what joy?). The high rank people behind the New World Order are said to be international bankers, and in particular the owners of the major private banks in the Federal Reserve System, Bank of England and most other central banks, and members of the Council on Foreign Relations, Trilateral Commission and Bilderberg Group and so on.

If your sentence has a very complex structure, it can be a bit difficult to read. When you find that you are skimming text, this is probably the cause. Take this fine example:

Saroah’s essay demonstrated (still goes on) what the qualities of an (still goes on) effective ruler should be, however, (still goes on) he forgot about how the common people would react to these (still goes on) qualities.

Here is an much better and improved sentence:

Saroah’s essay demonstrated what the qualities (still goes on) of an effective ruler should be, however (still goes on), he neglected the (still goes on) common people’s reaction.

This is similar to point (Rephrasing the sentence for Clarity), but rather than just re-arranging the sentence, we are going to be removing all the unnecessary (totally) weeds. It is very important to practice this skill cuz it will come in handy soon. Here is a bad sentence by a noob.

The last thing Saroah(still goes on) mentions is that one should (still goes on) always be ready to take on(still goes on) arms. He means ready to(still goes on) take arms as in a physical manner. A physical manner meaning with guns (still goes on) and fighters who are ready for battle.

Yuck. While you can (if you can) understand the sentence, it uses far too many words to get its simple point across. How about this piece of junk:

For Saroah, one should always (still goes on) be ready to take on(still goes on) arms, to do battle physically.

The My Lai Massacre was the genocide of 340 to 500 unarmed civilians of South Vietnam (republic of Vietnam) a majority of them women and children. Believe it or not the massacre was carried out by the U.S armed forces on March 16 of 68’. Before

Killed most of the victims were sexually harassed raped beaten tortured. Some of the dead bodies found there were very badly mutilated

Half a year later, Tom Glen a 21 year old solider of the 11^th light infantry wrote a letter to General Abrams, the new overall commander in Vietnam, accused the division of harassing and ill treating of the Vietnam citizens. Colin Powell then a 31 year ol army major was given the responsibility to investigate the letter. Most people claimed what he was doing was just an eyewash. In an interview with Larry king he just said these sort of things happen in war and they have to be deplored.

This may be a really controversial point, but I very strongly believe (so do many people) that, as much as and whenever possible, you really should try to avoid the use of words that have origins from the Romance languages (langs that have their roots in French, Romanian, Latin - Spanish, Italian, and Portuguese). This language grew over the years by taking a lot of bits and pieces from many other languages - some Romance, and some Germanic; and as a matter of fact, a lot of Romance words have a Germanic counterpart. Germanic words really do tend to feel much stronger and give a lot more weight to your writing. Take this fine example:

The British attempted to (still goes on) destroy the Colonial uprising in America. (Attempt, and destroy (still goes on) both have romance origins.)

A better sentence would be:

The British fought to crush (still goes on) the Colonial uprising in America. (Fought, and crush are both (still goes on) Germanic in origin.)

The second sentence is waaay stronger than the first garble. Sometimes it really can be difficult to find a Germanic equivalent, but you can sometimes normally do so with a really good thesaurus in hand.

Classified U.S docs reveal that were declassified in the later 1970s that en. Giovanni de Lorenzo chief of staff (Italian military int),joined the us in 1950’s preparing a plan against the communist take over, but chose to keep his own government in the dark.

According to a document released by Mr Andreotti the CIA and the Sifar had sketched a plan code named Gladio, to build a force of a 1000 strong, these men would be capable of guerilla warfare and espionage. They managed to set up a training base in Sadina and more than 130 dumps of weapons and ammo were collected and hidden in north Italy.

Galdio was controlled by a clandestine wing inside NATO and with collaboration deep within the superpowers of Europe. Waiting…..

You should really avoid index works as much as and whenever possible. A few index words are “this”, “that”, “these”, etc. Here is a cool example that would better illustrates the point I’m trying so hard to make:

The American colonials went (still goes on) to war with England-part1. They hoped to achieve independence (still goes on) through doing this.

A much better version would be:

The American colonials went to (still goes on) war with England. They hoped to achieve independence (still goes on) on the battlefield.

I truly realize that the particular sentence above is not the finest prose in the world, but it tries to illustrates the point. The second sentence is much stronger than the first garble.

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